Comment on Somnea’s Work
You, from my point of view, have to express or reflect some of your opinions about it to make it better. Otherwise, it does not seem to be yours- just collecting and combining the information together. And, I also think only bibliography and internet sources do not make your paper very good, you should add more footnotes in order to give the readers certain more specific information and understanding. This is just my suggestion, friend. Thank you.